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« on: January 19, 2004, 12:47:33 AM »
You penetrate my mind
with all these images of you....

You're a viruse in my system..
destroying me slowly...
apart...

You're an addiction that I need..

You're the one that makes me bleed..

you are a sudden rush in my veins..

You live in my mind...
and in my dreams...

You're Living In Me.....


 
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"I'm ReAdY tO rELivE dA paSt"  -SILVERSTEIN 'discovering the waterfornt'
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« Reply #1 on: January 19, 2004, 07:16:38 PM »
i like it all except for the last line, i dunno why, it just doesnt seem to fit to me.
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« Reply #2 on: January 20, 2004, 08:00:14 AM »
I just wanted to say that I liked this poem very much.  We don't always need a lot of words to express our hurt.
In response to the prior comment, I feel the last line sums up your entire poem. It's the perfect ending the way I see it!  Great poem!

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Poetry is an echo, asking a shadow to dance.
-Carl Sandburg
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Poetry isn’t a profession, it’s a way of life. It’s an empty basket; you put your life into it and make something out of that.
 -Mary Oliver 
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Poetry lifts the veil from the hidden beauty of the world, and makes familiar objects be as if they were not familiar.
-Percy Bysshe Shelley

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« Reply #3 on: January 27, 2004, 10:03:11 PM »
Lax,


it's all good... atleast u liked it  Cheesy  which is all that matters...





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« Reply #4 on: January 27, 2004, 10:05:22 PM »
Katie,
 i'm also glad that u liked my poem   :yes:  (jejeje)


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« Reply #5 on: February 03, 2004, 07:20:44 PM »
Brilliant, i can relate, as i am sure many others can. Amazing.
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